I was walking through the zoo, when I saw a shadow passing by.  It got closer to the zoo, and it happened to be a black monster that looked quite scary! The monster took the Talkative Monkey. To stop the monster, I used my special ability: shooting lasers through my eyes. I tried to stop him but, I failed. I knew that monsters had a special ability: to deviate into a microscopic insect. I saw him deviate into an insect, which made the monster free the monkeys. So I stepped on him with my shoe. I hope he learned a lesson.




Did you ever have a crazy night like this?
 


Rachel Wills (Team 100wc)
16/06/2013 07:41

Hi Juliana,
What a great idea! I love the Talkative Monkey - I bet he would be great to hang out with.
I liked your story as it didn't always do what I expected it to do, for example when you introduced your special ability I thought that you would defeat the baddie this way, but you didn't! It was a great twist that you ended up just squashing him with your foot.
I also like the pictures you have attached. Good effort.
Keep writing!
Rachel Wills (Team 100WC)

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